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is that your first letter to this client?
0{YLVW6@vWo If so, this mail maybe get into the junk mail. coz you attached the file, uD)\d:NM T4\
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*ECU @U What's your title? any payment information? delivery date?

Not bad. But you can write several forms and than, time will tell u which one is better. Anyway, it is only one point of trade business. Don't give up! There're many and many business people around u. Just as Floor 2, next time, you can send half without attachments and the other with it.

One more, don't always send the same content to the same email addr. Maybe one or two weeks for a try is ok.

the first email is just introduction , do not attach anything or it will be spam!u zr.F8e9E

;D-Z`9a%Q the other items should be noted: the subject(pls do not use "cooperation" and same meaning words, just wrte down your product name!)~7r2Mf#Mvg+m
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And also we need to send another e-mail to follow up.
?{"['c~{;rz Sometimes the phone is working. If you get the phone of your clients, why not make a call?

This is not the first letter.
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the title is "Professional power tools and accessories"!F V|Lu;U?
this letter is sent to one of my clients. i enclosed a catalogue and price list
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{.vox because we have talked already and these days he just disappearred.
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so i tried to send a mail with price list to see what i can do next

Reply #1 felixhuw's post

dear ms
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we are XXXXco. and specialize in this field
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and shall be glad to enter into business relations with you
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it is just my opinion

THANK U

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Reply #10 felixhuw's post

so can you copy the letter here?

I read all,and learn more